Need Essay corrected for assignment

wrote an essay and the teacher picked it apart like crazy. I need it fixed to what he is asking please. The files provided are the essay and the essay that was graded by the teacher and has what needs to be fixed about it. Theres a rubric to follow. You can add to the story to make it sounds good.MariaJesusaBowmerexam.docx22568647_700151.pdfPosted: 8 months agoDue: 18/05/2019Budget: $20Tags: essay Answers 1Miss Professor4.5 (1k )4.5 (17k )Chathi, RATE MEAnswer rating:5Stars out of1ratings8 months agoPurchase the answer to view itMariaJesusaBowmerexam1.docxTry it first(plagiarism check)Buy answer $20Bids 54PROVEN STERLINGTutor_MBADiscount AssignProf Double RCreative InstructorAshley Clairekite_solAsad UllahPHD doctorateGreat-Writersnadia tutorJOHN JUNIOR001writer respect Miss BrigitYoung Kim hoodsProf.MacQueenimhmd.fAngelina MayElprofessoriJessica Luisprofessor mitchRESPECT WRITERTiny ChrisCatherine Owensbrilliant answersKATHERINE BECKSColossal GeniusDr Candice_2547perfectoRey writerkatetutorANN HARRISJenny Boomkim woodsMiss ProfessorProf AllanAdrian MonroeClaire AudreyGoodwriterTerry RobertsJohn Mureithiwizard kimphyllis youngENS. writeransRohanPro SoniaAcuteMorganimtrqhasibEmily ClareAntoDukeJulia_Whiteuniversity workSara Waynesdnyaboke18Other questions 10Managerial Decision-MakingbrighteysI have 1300 draft , I need someone to help me to expand it to a 2000 paperI need help with a scientific paper (Biology)College AlgebraInternational Business Meeting between UAE, Israel, Mexico and Chiniai have math test college algebraSee DescriptionPROF.METILDAHSee DescriptionNot ratednew essayi need a new essay personal narrative between 750-2500 words following the rubric on the files. Rubric is towards the end18/05/201920english